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Member # 1607
posted 10-15-2000 09:57 PM
Hey, just wanted to make my message board debeut(I doubt I spelled that right) by offering my latest to the Scarleteen masses.
So here goes:
When Near You 10-10-00
by Outpatient #529
Body and mind on fire.
An ache, a longing For the slightest Physical touch. (Blazing desire: a burning for a mere simplicity.)
An excruciating contentment, An overwhelming stillness Just because you are near. (Beautiful countenance: like a balm to my fevered conciousness.)
This paradox you create.
My eternal devotion.
One must show love in the
Only way one knows how.
Y'all just tell me what you think of it. And remember not to be too gentle.
Member # 139
posted 10-15-2000 11:07 PM
Hehe. Great poem. A fellow writer! go here-
Tell me what you think!
I'd love to read more of your stuff.
Drop me a line!
Member # 406
posted 10-16-2000 01:43 AM
Dark Child, I loved your poem pain. It totally describes the way I feel all the time.. *sigh* Outpatient, I liked yours too. It's weird because that's not really my style but I could totally...I don't know. It was just like a window you know? It totally lets us see through... I don't know. I think poetry should be like that anyway.
I have tons of poems, most of them are sad and depressing and it's me in my teenage angst stage, but once I find my book (I lost it yet again!) I'll post a few...
I'm the good girl that everyone thinks is a bad girl pretending to be a good girl :D
Member # 1607
posted 10-16-2000 07:18 AM
Wow, thanks y'all. I really like yours too, DarkChild. I'd love to post some more; it's so nice to have people who are interested in one's work. I did think, however, that a pod person must have written that one, because most of my poems are kinda sad and depressing like you said yours are, Brittany. This was just in celebration of my first infatuation, really. (Love kinda sucks. :P)
Member # 139
posted 10-16-2000 11:11 PM
When I wrote pain, I was in a major depression bout. Got out of it with one scar. I ended up with "pain" written on my wrist. I know. It's bad to cut yourself. But my bestfriend made me stop. Confusion I wrote friday the thirteenth. Bad day for me...I still love him, darnit! Why must love be so cruel?
Member # 1480
posted 10-17-2000 10:53 AM
hi this was one i wrote on meeting my first love...well not physical meeting...we go tto know each otehr on teh net and at the time i wrote it we both just wanted to meet each otehr so bad and it seemed like if we never would
In a world that sometimes feels so dark adn alone Our spirits met & touched There a love was begun that feels so right & now I long to be with u so much
I want to hold your hand & walk with u
& to hold u close when u are feeling blue I want to kiss you under moonlit skies Or just sit & look into your eyes
I do not know what the future holds
Whether u & I will ever be But i know that the friendship & love I have in my heart for u Will last an eternity.
smile...its the second best thing u can do wiht ur lips ...sweetlips:)