T O P I C R E V I E W
Member # 48854
posted 09-10-2011 12:17 AM
I know we have a haiku thread on here, but what about other types of poetry?
So here's a thread for original poems, or poems you found that you really like, or anything! For me, I've got a few original ones and some that I just really like that I'll share. I should title this one "Algebra"...since that's where I wrote it. I did pass the class, though. Draw me. Not in charcoals. Not in pastels or pencils or paints. Draw me in blue ink delve into my mind lay it bare on the page. Show me as I am or seem to be. Drawn brown hair, grown long painstakingly. Draw a jacket, light blue, and a cartoon character on it. Draw blue jeans, washed loose, and excess length walked away. Draw pale skin, grey and purple with cold. Draw my imperfections. Draw the scars on my foot and my knees and my forehead. Draw the little scratch on my arm where I fell into a shower. And draw my memories. Draw my broken toe my bruise that I couldn't explain. The arm I broke and didn't realize- the arm I sprained on Valentine's. Draw my dreams and my fears and my love of life. Draw me in words. Me in Ten Years I passed the stupid young adult phase. My hair looks awful blonde since my skin is so pale and I hate it red. Black looks good though. I chickened out of the tattoo she drew me five times before I went through with it. Now a beautiful permanent proof of temporary insanity on the inside of my left wrist. Where on earth will I put all those temporary tattoos now? A cat sleeps on my chest I shove her off, good-naturedly, a scratch behind the ears softening the rejection. The little apartment is just big enough for one- I haven't found anyone yet, I'm sure if I actually went out to places I'd have better luck. My best friend is still the sexiest woman in the world even as a married lady. They live in Chicago. Good thing DADT was repealed. I'm due at work in half an hour today we meet reptiles. I'm glad I got over snake paranoia years ago. My health insurance covers pain meds I stopped freaking out about swallowing pills long ago. Now I have at least three just to function. My FelisFire account is a low ID number funny to see newbies try to buy it. User number 50,000 joined yesterday. Neopets just had Advent Calendar year 21 you won't believe it, but Team Faerieland won in Year 17. That was the year Faerie Paint Brushes sold for 25 million each and the all-stars wanted faerie pets. (FelisFire and Neopets are both virtual pet sites, FelisFire currently just hit five thousand users, and Neopets has a yearly competition...the team from "Faerieland" is famous for placing last or nearly last for the entire time the competition has been going. On the site, pets can be turned various colors through the use of paint brushes, and the winning land often has the paintbrush associated with it released as a prize at the end. The all-stars are a group of players who tend to do very well, and nearly every year, the team they all join wins. If a certain paint brush is expensive and they want their pet to be a certain color, they could make sure that team won and get the associated brush for cheap). I don't like to be rude, but... Oh, who am I kidding? I don't like to be rude. Full stop. I hate conflict tension problems discord however you say it. I'm quiet and timid wince when someone yells cry when it's directed at me. I'm changing a little. My skin is still thin but covered in scrapes bruises scabs evidence of disord. Maybe if I look the part I'll become it? Through a Glass Eye, Lightly by Carolyn Kizer In the laboratory waiting room containing one television actor with a teary face trying a contact lens; two muscular victims of industrial accidents; several vain women—I was one of them— came Deborah, four, to pick up her glass eye. It was a long day: Deborah waiting for the blood vessels painted on her iris to dry. Her mother said that, holding Deborah when she was born, “First I inspected her, from toes to navel, then stopped at her head ...” We wondered why the inspection hadn’t gone the other way. “Looking into her eye was like looking into a volcano: “Her vacant pupil went whirling down, down to the foundation of the world ... When she was three months old they took it out. She giggled when she went under the anaesthetic. Forty-five minutes later she came back happy! ... The gas wore off, she found the hole in her face (you know, it never bled?), stayed happy, even when I went to pieces. She’s five, in June. “Deborah, you get right down from there, or I’ll have to slap!” Laughing, Deborah climbed into the lap of one vain lady, who had been discontented with her own beauty. Now she held on to Deborah, looked her steadily in the empty eye. And, because this is a fun poem- One Perfect Rose, by Dorothy Parker A single flower he sent me since we met All tenderly his messenger he chose Deep-hearted, pure, with scented dew still wet One perfect rose. I knew the language of the floweret "My tender leaves", it said, "His heart enclose" Love long has taken for his amulet One perfect rose. Why is it no one ever sent me yet One perfect limousine, do you suppose? Ah, no, it's always just my luck to get One perfect rose. [ 09-10-2011, 12:22 AM: Message edited by: Kawani3792 ]
bump on a log
Member # 60751
posted 09-10-2011 11:04 AM
Really enjoyed all of these. Well done for writing yours; I like them all, particularly the second. You have a good feeling for the rhythm of a poem, I think, though what do I know as I never could write any. And thanks for introducing me to Carolyn Kizer, of whom I'd never heard.
Kingsley Amis: Years ago, at a private school Run on traditional lines, One fellow used to perform Prodigious feats in the dorm; His quite undevious designs Found many a willing tool. On the rugger-field, in the gym, Buck marked down at his leisure The likeliest bits of stuff; The notion, common enough, Of 'using someone for pleasure' Seemed handy and harmless to him. But another chap was above The diversions of such a lout; Seven years in the place And he never got to first base With the kid he followed about: What interested Ralph was love. He did the whole thing in style: Sonnet-sequences, Sunday walks, Letters three times a week; Then, during one of their talks, The youngster caressed his cheek, And that made it all worth while. These days, for a quid pro quo, Ralph's chum does what, and with which; Buck's playmates, family men, Eye a Boy Scout now and then. Sex is a momentary itch, Love never lets you go. And here are several by a favourite poet of mine, Charlotte Mew. 'An Ending' You know that road beside the sea, Walled by the wavin' wheat Which winds down to the little town Wind-blown and grey and up the crooked street? We'd used to meet Just at the top, and when the grass was trodden down 'Twas by our feet. We'd used to stand And watch the clouds like a great fleet Sail over the sea and over the land, And the gulls dart Above our heads; and by the gate At the road's end, when et was late And all the ships was showing lights on quiet nights, We'd used to part. So, Sir, you think I've missed my way, There's nothing but the Judgement Seat - But ef I pray perhaps I may - what's that you say - A golden street? Give me the yellow wheat! Et edn't there we'm going to meet! No, I'm not mazed, I make no doubt That ef we don't my soul goes out 'Most like a candle in the everlasting dark. And what's the odds? 'Twas just a spark Alight for her. I tell you, Sir, That God He made et brave and plain, Sin' he knows better than yon Book What's in a look You'd go to Hell to get again. Another hour? An hour to wait - ! I sim I'll meet her at the gate - You know that road beside the sea - The crooked street - the wavin' wheat - ? (What's that? A lamp! Et made me start - ) That's where our feet - we'd used to meet - on quiet nights - My God! the ships es showing lights! - We'd used - to part. 'Pécheresse' Down the long quay the slow boats glide, While here and there a house looms white Against the gloom of the waterside, And some high window throws a light As they sail out into the night. At dawn they will bring in again To women knitting on the quay Who wait for him, their man of men; I stand with them, and watch the sea Which may have taken mine from me. Just so the long days come and go. The nights, ma Doué! the nights are cold! Our Lady's heart is as frozen snow, Since this one sin I have not told; And I shall die or perhaps grow old Before he comes. The foreign ships Bring many a one of face and name As strange as his, to buy your lips, A gold piece for a scarlet shame Like mine. But mine was not the same. One night was ours, one short grey day Of sudden sin, unshrived, untold. He found me, and I lost the way To Paradise for him. I sold My soul for love and not for gold. He bought my soul, but even so, My face is all that he has seen, His is the only face I know, And in the dark church, like a screen. It shuts God out; it comes between; While in some narrow foreign street Or loitering on the crowded quay, Who knows what others he may meet To turn his eyes away from me? Many are fair to such as he! There is but one for such as I To love, to hate, to hunger for; I shall, perhaps, grow old and die, With one short day to spend and store, One night, in all my life, no more. Just so the long days come and go, Yet this one sin I will not tell Though Mary's heart is as frozen snow And all nights are cold for one warmed too well. But, oh! ma Doué! the nights of Hell! 'The Changeling' Toll no bell for me, dear Father, dear Mother, Waste no sighs; There are my sisters, there is my little brother Who plays in the place called Paradise, Your children all, your children for ever; But I, so wild, Your disgrace, with the queer brown face, was never, Never, I know, but half your child! In the garden at play, all day, last summer, Far and away I heard The sweet "tweet-tweet" of a strange new-comer, The dearest, clearest call of a bird. It lived down there in the deep green hollow, My own old home, and the fairies say The word of a bird is a thing to follow, So I was away a night and a day. One evening, too, by the nursery fire, We snuggled close and sat round so still, When suddenly as the wind blew higher, Something scratched on the window-sill, A pinched brown face peered in - I shivered; No one listened or seemed to see; The arms of it waved and the wings of it quivered, Whoo - I knew it had come for me! Some are as bad as bad can be! All night long they danced in the rain, Round and round in a dripping chain, Threw their caps at the window-pane, Tried to make me scream and shout And fling the bedclothes all about: I meant to stay in bed that night, And if only you had left a light They would never have got me out! Sometimes I wouldn't speak, you see, Or answer when you spoke to me, Because in the long, still dusks of Spring You can hear the whole world whispering; The shy green grasses making love, The feathers grow on the dear grey dove, The tiny heart of the redstart beat, The patter of the squirrel's feet, The pebbles pushing in the silver streams, The rushes talking in their dreams, The swish-swish of the bat's black wings, The wild-wood bluebell's sweet ting-tings, Humming and hammering at your ear, Everything there is to hear In the heart of hidden things. But not in the midst of the nursery riot, That's why I wanted to be quiet, Couldn't do my sums, or sing, Or settle down to anything. And when, for that, I was sent upstairs I did kneel down to say my prayers; But the King who sits on your high church steeple Has nothing to do with us fairy people! 'Times I pleased you, dear Father, dear Mother, Learned all my lessons and liked to play, And dearly I loved the little pale brother Whom some other bird must have called away. Why did they bring me here to make me Not quite bad and not quite good, Why, unless They're wicked, do They want, in spite, to take me Back to Their wet, wild wood? Now, every night I shall see the windows shining, The gold lamp's glow, and the fire's red gleam, While the best of us are twining twigs and the rest of us are whining In the hollow by the stream. Black and chill are Their nights on the wold; And They live so long and They feel no pain: I shall grow up, but never grow old, I shall always, always be very cold, I shall never come back again! 'On the Road to the Sea' We passed each other, turned and stopped for half an hour, then went our way, I who make others smile did not make you - But no man can move mountains in a day. So this hard thing is yet to do. But first I want your life: - before I die I want to see The world that lies behind the strangeness of your eyes, There is nothing gay or green there for my gathering, it may be, Yet on brown fields there lies A haunting purple bloom: is there not something in grey skies And in grey sea? I want what world there is behind your eyes, I want your life because you will not give it me. Now, if I look, I see you walking down the years, Young, and through August fields - a Face, a Thought, a swinging Dream perched on a stile -; I would have liked (how vile we are!) to have taught you tears But most to have made you smile. To-day is not enough or yesterday: God sees it all - Your length on sunny lawns, the wakeful rainy nights -; tell me? -; how hideous to ask, but it is not a question - just a call -; Show me then, only your notched inches climbing up the garden wall, I like you best when you were small. Is this a stupid thing to say Not having spent with you one day? No matter; I shall never touch your hair Or hear the little tick behind your breast, Still it is there, And as a flying bird Brushes the branches where it may not rest I have brushed your hand and heard The child in you: I like that best. So small, so dark, so sweet; and were you also then too grave and wise? Always I think. Then put your far off little hand in mine; - Oh! let it rest; I will not stare into the early world beyond the opening eyes, Or vex or scare what I love best. But I want your life before mine bleeds away - Here - not in heavenly hereafters - soon, - I want your smile this very afternoon, The last of all my vices, pleasant people used to say, I wanted and I sometimes got - the Moon! You know, at dusk, the last bird's cry, And round the house the flap of the bat's low flight, Trees that go black against the sky And then - how soon the night! No shadow of you on any bright road again, And at the darkening end of this - what voice? whose kiss? As if you'd say! It is not I who have walked with you, it will not be I who take away Peace, peace, my little handful of the gleaner's grain From your reaped fields at the shut of day. Peace! Would you not rather die Reeling, - with all the cannons at your ear? So, at least, would I, And I may not be here To-night, to-morrow morning or next year. Still I will let you keep your life a little while, See dear? I have made you smile. 'Ken' The town is old and very steep, A place of bells and cloisters and grey towers, And black-clad people walking in their sleep - A nun, a priest, a woman taking flowers To her new grave; and watched from end to end By the great Church above, through the still hours: But in the morning and the early dark The children wake to dart from doors and call Down the wide, crooked street, where, at the bend, Before it climbs up to the park, Ken's is the gabled house facing the Castle wall. When first I came upon him there Suddenly, on the half-lit stair, I think I hardly found a trace Of likeness to a human face In his. And I said then If in His image God made men, Some other must have made poor Ken - But for his eyes which looked at you As two red, wounded stars might do. He scarcely spoke, you scarcely heard, His voice broke off in little jars To tears sometimes. An uncouth bird He seemed as he ploughed up the street, Groping, with knarred, high-lifted feet And arms thrust out as if to beat Always against a threat of bars. And oftener than not there'd be A child just higher than his knee Trotting beside him. Through his dim Long twilight this, at least, shone clear, That all the children and the deer, Whom every day he went to see Out in the park, belonged to him. "God help the folk that next him sits He fidgets so, with his poor wits." The neighbours said on Sunday nights When he would go to Church to "see the lights!" Although for these he used to fix His eyes upon a crucifix In a dark corner, staring on Till everybody else had gone. And sometimes, in his evil fits, You could not move him from his chair - You did not look at him as he sat there, Biting his rosary to bits. While pointing to the Christ he tried to say "Take it away." Nothing was dead: He said "a bird" if he picked up a broken wing, A perished leaf or any such thing Was just "a rose"; and once when I had said He must not stand and knock there any more, He left a twig on the mat outside my door. Not long ago The last thrush stiffened in the snow, While black against a sullen sky The sighing pines stood by. But now the wind has left our rattled pane To flutter the hedge-sparrow's wing, The birches in the wood are red again And only yesterday The larks went up a little way to sing What lovers say Who loiter in the lanes to-day; The buds begin to talk of May With learned rooks on city trees, And if God please With all of these We too, shall see another Spring. But in that red brick barn upon the hill I wonder - can one own the deer, And does one walk with children still As one did here - Do roses grow Beneath those twenty windows in a row - And if some night When you have not seen any light They cannot move you from your chair What happens there? I do not know. So, when they took Ken to that place, I did not look After he called and turned on me His eyes. These I shall see - 'The Farmer's Bride' Three Summers since I chose a maid, Too young maybe - but more's to do At harvest-time than bide and woo. When us was wed she turned afraid Of love and me and all things human; Like the shut of a winter's day. Her smile went out, and 'twasn't a woman-- More like a little, frightened fay. One night, in the Fall, she runned away. "Out 'mong the sheep, her be," they said, 'Should properly have been abed; But sure enough she wasn't there Lying awake with her wide brown stare. So over seven-acre field and up-along across the down We chased her, flying like a hare Before our lanterns. To Church-Town All in a shiver and a scare We caught her, fetched her home at last And turned the key upon her, fast. She does the work about the house As well as most, but like a mouse: Happy enough to chat and play With birds and rabbits and such as they, So long as men-folk stay away. "Not near, not near!" her eyes beseech When one of us comes within reach. The women say that beasts in stall Look round like children at her call. I've hardly heard her speak at all. Shy as a leveret, swift as he, Straight and slight as a young larch tree, Sweet as the first wild violets, she, To her wild self. But what to me? The short days shorten and the oaks are brown, The blue smoke rises to the low gray sky, One leaf in the still air falls slowly down, A magpie's spotted feathers lie On the black earth spread white with rime, The berries redden up to Christmas-time. What's Christmas-time without there be Some other in the house than we! She sleeps up in the attic there Alone, poor maid. 'Tis but a stair Betwixt us. Oh, my God! - the down, The soft young down of her; the brown, The brown of her - her eyes, her hair, her hair! [ 09-10-2011, 11:27 AM: Message edited by: bump on a log ]
Member # 48854
posted 09-10-2011 01:28 PM
Thank you! I have always had an interest in writing, but I was lucky enough to attend a camp for aspiring young writers-a week long sleepaway camp in the woods of Harriman State Park of Idaho. It's beautiful and we had professional authors as our teachers. I consider myself insanely lucky to have gone.
I found the Carolyn Kizer poem (actually, both of those poems that aren't by me) through a program called Poetry Out Loud, a national poetry recitation competition. At this point, though I might flub a few words, I can recite the entirety of that poem. So when I was thinking of good poems I wanted to share, that one occurred to me. Thank you for showing me some new writers as well, those are all really great!
bump on a log
Member # 60751
posted 10-05-2011 02:05 PM
Here is a lighthearted poem in French -- we're bound to have some Francophones among us, aren't we? Prévert does not translate well but I can make a stab at a translation if anyone's interested.
Cortège Un vieillard en or avec une montre en deuil Une reine de peine avec un homme d'Angleterre Et des travailleurs de la paix avec des gardiens de la mer Un hussard de la farce avec un dindon de la mort Un serpent à café avec un moulin à lunettes Un chasseur de corde avec un danseur de têtes Un maréchal d'écume avec une pipe en retraite Un canard à Sainte-Hélène avec un Napoléon à l'orange Un conservateur de Samothrace avec une victoire de cimetière Un remorqueur de famille nombreuse avec un père de haute mer Un contrôleur à la croix de bois avec un petit chanteur d'autobus Un chirurgien terrible avec un enfant dentiste Et le général des huîtres avec un ouvreur de Jésuites.
Member # 26516
posted 10-06-2011 08:58 PM
Super poème Bump on a Log! Je l'ai vraiment aimé
bump on a log
Member # 60751
posted 10-07-2011 10:43 AM
Ça me fait rire. Je suis content que tu l'aies aimé aussi.
Since Tomas Tranströmer has just won the Nobel Prize, let's have one of his poems. Here it is in Swedish (any Scandinavians around?): Ensamhet Här var jag nära att omkomma en kväll i februari. Bilen gled sidledes på halkan, ut på fel sida av vägen. De mötande bilarna – deras lyktor – kom nära. Mitt namn, mina flickor, mitt jobb lösgjorde sig och blev kvar tyst bakom, allt längre bort. Jag var anonym som en pojke på en skolgård omgiven av fiender. Mötande trafik hade väldiga ljus. De lyste på mig medan jag styrde och styrde i en genomskinlig skräck som flöt som äggvita. Sekunderna växte – man fick rum där – de blev stora som sjukhusbyggnader. Man kunde nästan stanna upp och andas ut en stund innan man krossades. Då uppstod ett fäste: ett hjälpande sandkorn eller en underbar vindstöt. Bilen kom loss och krälade snabbt tvärs över vägen. En stolpe sköt upp och knäcktes – en skarp klang – den flög bort i mörkret. Tills det blev stilla. Jag satt kvar i selen och såg hur någon kom genom snöyran för att se vad det blev av mig. II Jag har gått omkring länge på de frusna östgötska fälten. Ingen människa har varit i sikte. I andra delar av världen finns de som föds, lever, dör i en ständig folkträngsel. Att alltid vara synlig – leva i en svärm av ögon – måste ge ett särskilt ansiktsuttryck. Ansikte överdraget med lera. Mumlandet stiger och sjunker medan de delar upp mellan sig himlen, skuggorna, sandkornen. Jag måste vara ensam tio minuter på morgonen och tio minuter på kvällen. – Utan program. Alla står i kö hos alla. Flera. En. And in English, translated by Robin Fulton: I One evening in February I came near to dying here. The car skidded sideways on the ice, out on the wrong side of the road. The approaching cars – their lights – closed in. My name, my girls, my job broke free and were left silently behind further and further away. I was anonymous like a boy in a playground surrounded by enemies. The approaching traffic had huge lights. They shone on me while I pulled at the wheel in a transparent terror that floated like egg white. The seconds grew – there was space in them – they grew as big as hospital buildings. You could almost pause and breathe out for a while before being crushed. Then something caught: a helping grain of sand or a wonderful gust of wind. The car broke free and scuttled smartly right over the road. A post shot up and cracked – a sharp clang – it flew away in the darkness. Then – stillness. I sat back in my seat-belt and saw someone coming through the whirling snow to see what had become of me. II I have been walking for a long time on the frozen Östergötland fields. I have not seen a single person. In other parts of the world there are people who are born, live and die in a perpetual crowd. To be always visible – to live in a swarm of eyes – a special expression must develop. Face coated with clay. The murmuring rises and falls while they divide up among themselves the sky, the shadows, the sand grains. I must be alone ten minutes in the morning and ten minutes in the evening. – Without a programme. Everyone is queuing at everyone's door. Many. One.